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Posted by rcal4848 • 6/08/09 • Subscribe to this Discussion [RSS] • Report This Topic
Topics: west virginia
I just finished what I presently think to be the finest piece of writing I've ever constructed. I'd love for you to check it out and let me know what you think, I may even try and get it published some how.
It's about a trip to West Virginia, as a young man, to a festival, and the exploits of an epic trip once there. Even if that doesn't sound interesting to you, the writing most likely will draw you in. Please check it out.
Appreciate it!
Ross
benwaysrustyscalpel.wordpress.com/2009/06/08/west-virginia/
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Looks good. The only point I would make is that for a piece that is about 30+ paragraphs, the intro of about 12 paragraphs should be shorter--get to the story faster. You may add some of the intro elements woven throughout, but it is slow to start out.
Other than that, as a reader I think it is great. -
thanks I'm glad you enjoyed it! The intro that you seem to be talking about is not an intro but part of the story, I think it just didn't have the sleek muscled body and lateral vertebrae that the rest of the story had.
People I'd really appreciate your opinions. -
Ill check it out right now, and let you know my two cents on it. I think I've just written a powerful article if you want to check it out as well.
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